It's time for Romantic Friday Writers, a bi-weekly blogfest hosted by Denise and Donna who challenge us to write romantic prosetry (prose and/or poetry) in 400 words or less based on the given theme. RFW is open to everyone and you don't even have to be a member to take part, but membership does come with a few privileges! The challenge for Wk41 is "Three Things You Could Have Done Better". To read the other entries or to add one of your own, click here... For membership & submission guidelines, click here...
(Word count: 260 *MPA - see code below post)
Lady Flower, it saddens me knowing
my morning prayers for you were never welcomed at the altar of your shrine or even
heard within the kindness of your listening heart.
You turned me away every time with
a prudent smile and refused the sunflowers I offered you, simply because they were
not roses bought from riches and gold.
Yes, because of my inexpensive
garb and unappealing image, you laughed at me, even when I tried to shelter you
from the rain.
I knew I could never have your
sweet friendship, so to enter your path with honeyed words was never my
intention.
All I ever wanted was for you to
take notice of my admiration for your beautiful image and to embrace my
kindness with the lowest rank of flowers now wilting in my trembling hands.
If I were a king, I could offer
you kingdoms of silver, platinum and gold.
If I were a learned man, I could read
aloud poetry to you from the world's greatest love poets.
In fact, if it were in my power,
I would bathe you in Jasmine and honey and then cover you in perfumed oil.
Sadly, I am frail in appearance
and cannot speak with a poetic tongue, but I am honest and bear the gift of
faithfulness born from a deathless love.
Gorgeous stranger, I want nothing from you, except perhaps a smile to motivate me to nurture these abandoned flowers back to life, before the sting of death closes the tear-filled eyes of this lonely and poor, but contented man.
Thats unbelievable i loved it
ReplyDeleteIts a fairy tale so precious to be shared
I read it on way back home after long stressed day and reading this relaxed me alot.thank you so much
My dear Radwa,
DeleteMany thanks for those encouraging and touching words. My heart is truly humbled my friend.
Hi Andy
ReplyDeleteLovely words touching hearts to the core. I'd rather your humble sunflower laced with beautiful kindness, love and friendship over the beautiful but cold, pretentious and thorny roses anytime *smiles*
Dearest Angie,
DeleteYou have blown my mind with your dynamic words of beauty and tenderness (smile). I am most touched by each one and have gotten a glimpse into your beautiful heart. Thank you so much my friend.
Full of pathos...well done again.
ReplyDeleteMy beautiful Nargis,
DeleteGreat word from you...pathos. Its the same word used many times to describe the voice of My Mukesh. Thank you so much my friend.
Honored and humbled too.
DeleteMy sweet and darling Nargis,
DeleteYou even thrill me with your divine humility....smile.
I'm certain that flower will respond, and see for herself that you're not frail - in appearance or otherwise. (ha)
ReplyDeleteLoved reading about your love, as always Andy.
My sweet Myrna,
DeleteHow kind you continue to be to this humble poet. I am moved by your words of honesty regarding my work. I am so PROUD to call you friend. Thank you so much my dear.
Oh, that bitter sting of unrequited love . . . You've expressed it so beautifully here, Andy.
ReplyDeleteBlessings!
Dear Martha,
DeleteThank you once again for the lovely remarks. It is no secret that I am a man full of emotions. I am thankful for the visit my dear.
Andy...this post has brought a huuugeee smile on my face.
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Dear Me,
DeleteThank you for the kind words. I am happy you enjoyed my entry for RFW. Thank you so much.
Oh this was something.. It was beautiful. As always. I loved the last verse especially.
ReplyDeleteDearest Crystal,
DeleteBeautiful words from you my friend. I am so thankful for each and every one of them. You made me smile from deep within.
This is a deep cry from the heart Andy, from a loving man to a rather unloving lady. Full of emotion and pathos. Steadfast love described at its best.
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My dearest Denise,
DeleteYour words are so tender, touching and beautiful. I am moved by your expression over my humble work. I truly love the word pathos and love when you visit me with such a sweet smile. Thank you my dear friend.
Creative write, Andy. Love the way you used the prompt and still retained the romance element. Well done, my friend:)
ReplyDeleteDearest friend adura,
DeleteThank you for the kind words and the visit. Your support is always appreciated my dear. Thank you again.
Once again, my dear friend, you have taken my breath away (sigh). Beautiful post Andy.
ReplyDeleteMy dear and sweet Mary,
DeleteVery nice thoughts from you my friend. I am so grateful for your lovely remarks. You left me smiling...
Beautiful Andy! She doesn't deserve your love if she is not willing to accept or reciprocate :)
ReplyDeleteDear heather,
DeleteThank you for the visit and kind words. If I was that man...I would take your advice (smile).
Andy Dear,
ReplyDeleteYour posts are always delighting and worth reading. Sorry for not reading your all posts and not taking part in Lovers' Cove too.I am preparing for my exams... if anyhow I write something in my leisure time I post it on my blog. Rarely get time to come online. Hope you understand !
Take care
My dear Simran,
DeleteExams are FIRST and Blogging and friends last. No problem my dear. Study hard until you achieve your goal(s). Thank you so much for the kind words. I do miss you and always will (smile).
Loved this beautiful piece on Lady Flower especially exquisite lines like "If it were in my power I would bathe you in jasmine & honey". Have a great Sunday Andy.
ReplyDeleteMy brother Ram,
DeleteThank you for the visit and encouragement. I always appreciate your kind words. They mean very much to this humble man. Thank you again my friend.
Hi,
ReplyDeleteOh Andy, unrequited love and shattered dreams. Why cannot Lady Flower feel the poetic pain... Lovely piece as always! You never fail to please. ;)
best
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My dear Francine,
DeleteThank you for the warm and kind sentiments. You know I adore your visits and smile. Thank you again my sweet friend.
Lovely piece of writing Andy!
ReplyDeleteAshok my friend,
DeleteI am happy for the kind words from you. I really appreciate your support sir. Thank you so much.
Unrequited love. All the things you could have done better would be for naught, me thinks. That's how it always goes.
ReplyDeleteDear Scheherazade,
DeleteThank you for the visit and kind words. They were much appreciated.
How sad she sees only the material. Beautiful words Andy.
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Dear Donna,
DeleteAlways grateful for the visit and warm sentiments. Thank you very much.
Back for a second read my poetic friend. It only gets better. D
ReplyDeleteMy dearest Denise,
DeleteOnce again I thank you with humility and kindness for your lovely sentiments. Thank you so much my friend.
I prefer sunfloers and daisies to roses. :)
ReplyDeleteMy dear Rachel,
DeletePoint taken (smile). Thank you for stopping by and leaving such kind words.
The Lady Flower! Sir, I am amazed how every new poem of yours seem so fresh and flowery...
ReplyDeleteAnshul,
DeleteThank you for the warm remarks. I am grateful and humbled by them. Thank you so much.
Dear Andy,
ReplyDeleteYour poem expresses the pain of unrequited love so beautifully. Lovely flower images too. Flowers are so romantic, in poetry or real life!
Sorry, I'm so late with my round of comments.
Thank you for your thoughts about my post. Yes, this is a theme (the presumed dead spouse), that occurs in abundance in real life as well as in literature. I made a list of my sources of inspiration for this ongoing story and have about thirteen sources - fact and fiction.
Hope you are having a beautiful summer!
Best wishes,
Anna
Three things I could have done better
My dear Anna,
DeleteThank you for the visit and kind words. You my friend are very creative and talented. Fact or Fiction, your work always sound do good and real. That is talent my dear and yes, you have it!! Thank you again.
Dear friend: fascinating expressions you wrote. You rise de spirit to a cloud of silk, floating in the wonderful sky. Kiss Elen
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