It's time again for Romantic Friday Writers, a bi-weekly blogfest hosted by Denise & Donna who challenge us to write romantic prosetry (prose and/or poetry) in 400 words or less based on the given theme. For Wk42, the challenge is "I NEED A CHANGE!". RFW is open to everyone and you don't even have to be a member to take part, but membership does come with a few privileges. For submission/membership guidelines, click here... To read the other entries and/or join the fun, click here...
(Word count: 237 *MPA=Minimum Critique Points Acceptable)
This on-again, off-again love affair has played its final scene and it has become pointless in discussing it further or shedding any more unnecessary tears over it.
The fixation I once had for your bashful
smile has faded away just like a figment of my imagination on a rainy
day.
Darling, the emblematic touch of
your silky hands is no longer the imprint my flesh desires neither are the kisses
from your rosy lips the fire my heart welcomes.
Sadly, you misled me with the
warmth of your embrace, the poetic words of love falling falsely from your tongue
and the silence you spoke all too often, especially on those nights when I
could not even reach you by phone.
Yes, my dear, the final scene of
this love affair is over and so are the misery, heartache and bitter tears I endured
for months over the mystery of you.
No longer am I bound to a woman
whose faithfulness, sincerity and love does not match mine, for the shackles of my
doubt and mistrust have been cast into the winds, signaling the beginning of
sweet freedom for me.
As a new day dawns on the horizon,
I bid farewell to the past and welcome many more glorious moments with someone
else who might not be as beautiful as you, but whose tears are honest enough to
sustain me with love until the end of my days.
Written by/copyright Andy David © 2010-present
*Image modified from here
A saga...depicted once again beautifully.
ReplyDeleteDear Poetess,
DeletePersonally, I have never experience this life but know that it exist. Thank you for the encouragement my friend.
I wouldn't want to ever get on your bad side.. I believe I like you a lot better when you are pledging your never ending love to us all and for all the world to see!! But still, this is all so very bitter sweet.. another lovely and beautiful post Andy. :)
ReplyDeleteMy dear Crystal,
DeleteThere really is no bad side to me. I can accept hurt and walk away quite easily. All I have are words within to express pain, joy and sweet love (smile). Thank you for the kind thoughts. You are a great friend!
:)
DeleteSmiling back at you my friend...
DeleteOh......it brought tears to my eyes.....very touching !
ReplyDeleteDear Me,
DeleteThank you for your heartfelt thoughts. You are so kind to my humble work.
I have the will, my efforce, but maybe you aren´t agree because my English is not perfect. I love to stay here with you, it´s my dream to know your lenguage, I like a lot it. I have the intention to learn and practice - I love to all of you. Elen
ReplyDeleteMy dear Elen,
DeleteYou are a great human being with a beautiful heart. I appreciate your friendship for who you are and not how you speak or write. I remain your friend (smile).
Oh dear there is such sadness in this piece. I hope your
ReplyDeleteMC finds some closure as well as happiness and fulfilment.
Dear Madeleine,
DeleteYes, an unkind love can mislead the heart in so many ways. Thank you for the visit and support.
An ending to a sour relationship is better than fruitlessly clinging to it. You have immaculately portrayed the theme of this challenge through this poem.
ReplyDeleteMy dear Sui,
DeleteYour words bear beauty and truth. Thank you for those well written thoughts. I appreciate your support and encouragement my friend.
Glad he's realised there is more to a person than just physical beauty and that sometimes we can fall in love with somebody we never thought we would.
ReplyDeleteDear Sally.
DeleteMany thanks for the visit. Yes, sometimes we can give away our heart to someone not deserving of it. Thank you again.
So sad....the pain is so intense! Insincerity destroyed the love that should have bloomed beautifully. Glad that you're going to forget the past and open a new chapter of life.
ReplyDeleteVery well-expressed. Loved it.
My dear Balqis,
DeleteYou are so kind to me!! Thank you for the lovely sentiments. You always make me smile.
I love how you end this, my friend. All that glitters is not gold, as the saying goes. Or as I prefer to say: Not all gold glitter:)
ReplyDeleteMy dear Adura,
DeleteLove your saying about gold (smile). Thank you for the encouragement and support. You know it means so much to me.
Wow Andy, this is the first time I've seen you write about a love that is over. Even in breaking up with a woman your words are romantic. You're like the French...you can say anything and it sounds beautiful;)
ReplyDeleteMy dearest Leah,
DeleteI could HUG you right now!! You are the very first reader to see and express my thoughts as romantic even when the love is over. Well done my friend!! In fact, Its really how I am. I can always walk away and still say the sweetest things (smile). Fortunately, I have never experienced this.
Hi Andy
ReplyDeleteDito Leah. That said, I was impressed by your ability to craft a story that was less poetry. I guess I've gotten use to poetry from you. Well written. Loved it.
Nancy
Dear Nancy,
DeleteYes, it is always a challenge when it come to RFW week (smile). Thank you for the kind words and encouragement. I am most grateful.
Andy, I think this is one of my favorite pieces you have written. I love the strength in this character, no longer willing to settle with less than the best :)
ReplyDeleteDear Heather,
DeleteFor my Denise I would write anything (smile). Thank you very much for your beautiful thoughts. will be over to visit everyone later. I am most grateful.
Oh my...that wasn't easy to read. Very different to your earlier poems I would say. Moving, powerful, determined...A fantastic work Andy
ReplyDeleteDear Eclipse,
DeleteThank you my friend for the encouragement. I appreciate the feedback that means so much to me. In fact, I am so grateful to hear from you again so soon. Thank you so much.
I like the emotion in this, the anger and the determination to move on.
ReplyDeleteNice write as always.
Have a great weekend Andy.
My dear Myrna,
DeleteThank you for the kind remarks my friend. I can always depend on you to make me smile. I am grateful to you always.
Way to stab a girl in the heart Andy! Oh my, could I steal this for one of my girlfriends - she could change "woman" to man and it would so fit for her, lol. If I received a dear jane letter like this I wouldn't know whether to cry at my loss or be reprimanded for my inattentiveness. I liked this ending to a relationship; and it still has all the romantic passion I enjoy from your writings.
ReplyDeleteI liked this darker side of romance Andy; love and passion work both ways :)
.........dhole
My dear Donna,
DeleteYou are so kind to me. I had to smile from your sense of humor. I am grateful for the visit and support my friend. Thank you so very much.
I love your little 'Final Scene' movie board, Andy. Your technology princess is ultra clever! As are you, my friend. This could have been depressing coming from you who extols the love of a woman, but I was pleased that this man was nobody's fool.
ReplyDeleteDenise
My dearest Denise,
DeleteFor you I will climb any mountain and swim any sea (smile). In other words, I will always be part of RFW because of you (smile). Thank you for the sweet thoughts on my humble work. You know I am most grateful my friend.
Fiction? Or sad fact, Andy?
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and poignant finale.
Dear Debra,
DeleteThank you for stopping by and for the kind words. Yes, it was all fiction. I love to change my moods when I write about love (smile). After all, this kind of experience do exist. Thank you very much my friend.
Beautifully penned Andy. Being jilted & cheated in love can be emotionally draining & devastating. Have a great Sunday & Good Luck for the contest. Ram
ReplyDeleteDear Ram,
DeleteThank you for the support and encouragement. Your words are true, being cheated on is not a good thing. I appreciate the feedback my friend.
A touching tale of heartbreak and strength once again. Past is better left in the past :)
ReplyDeleteMy dear Sulekkha,
DeleteYes, the past should be left in the past (smile). I guess we can see how fiction writing can feel so real. Thank you for your kindness my sister.
One last sad scene but liberating.
ReplyDeleteDear Leovi,
DeleteThank you for the visit and words of truth. Please know it was greatly appreciated.
The tragic ending but hopefully a new love story in the making...The words followed beautifully.
ReplyDeleteDear Rek,
DeleteThank you for the honest feedback. I appreciate the visit and kind words my friend.
You're gonna wash that woman out of your hair...revenge of the pen. Ah, Andy, you finally gave the lovely what she deserves. No more adoration from you. And I thought you were an incurable romantic. Just joshing with you, Andy.
ReplyDeleteDear Scheherazade,
DeleteYou know I had to smile as I was thinking of the commercial (LOL). Thank you for the support my friend. I really enjoyed reading your thoughts today.
Unrequited love is always painful, but even more painful for the one has not known love.
ReplyDeleteThe story is painful yet your words are soulful one just have to stay with the pain a while...
Dear Anne,
DeleteYour words bear wisdom and truth. Thank you for the feedback and for the visit. I do appreciate them.
Those words ring true and are very well written. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteDear Jessica,
DeleteI appreciate your comment. I hope I can always make you smile when you visit. Thank you so much.
Dear Andy,
ReplyDeleteBeing a writer of fiction means that we must occasionally try to write things that we have not experienced: 'what-ifs'. You say that you have never experienced this, and yet you have the imagination to express what it might be like.
Well done.
Thank you for your thoughts about my character, Priscilla. Yes, she has suffered a hard blow, but I feel more for Jenny who has suffered most of all. Priscilla is still young enough to shake this off as a lesson, and learn from it. But there is a risk that she may fall in love on the rebound, as Rek suggested.
Best wishes,
Anna
RFW No.42 - 'I need a change'
my dear Anna,
DeleteOn my work it was all fiction but know such emotions and experiences do exist. As you know, a great imagination also helps (smile). Your work was impressive and felt so real. I am not good at writing stories so when I find a good one like yours, I get lost in it. We are all hoping for Jenny to fall in love again. Thank you my friend for the visit and kind words. You are indeed a GREAT writer!!